[quote]They�re not really that great because they�re so popular that people in FT High talk about them a lot (Remember the stripper?). Llyanz, the daughter of the Principal, got drunk at a victory party two years and ended up having a one night stand with the Eggplant. Nobody knows his name, even if he�s so popular. Her dad took over her school schedule, he even banned her from going to victory parties (anywhere where the boys are). But I heard he stopped doing that ever since Llyanz heard what the travelling word said about her father.[/quote] Llyanz will kill you for this Awesome pictures there

[quote=bianx]I hope there will also be a visual image for the coach next time[/quote] fangirling. [quote=chaw;#387855;1395261848]And I want to tell the all of their life stories before I get down to the main plot. So yeah. This is all background story.[/quote] I'm gunna play editor. Actually I think the main char's life stories should even be a lil longer, the info was a bit scarce. And you also have to describe yourself from time to time because the readers don't know you. Also, Alex doesn't have a description the first time you mentioned him. [i]�I heard he digs men. �[/i] >> should be I heard 'the coach' digs men, coz you were talking about aya-sensei. [quote=chaw;#387855;1395261848]�Wow, he really did it.�[/quote] Did what exactly? [quote=chaw;#387855;1395261848]�Child, why�are�you�crying�?� "I cannot tell them... I'm too afraid! " "Child, do not cry...."[/quote] I dunno I kinda got lost here. Were you narrating an urban legend or sth?

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Lol I thought I was clear enough when I wrote this chapter. Hahahahhaha sorry yall I was writing it thinking it was a script for a series episode I didn't want to write about my character yet because I said in the very beginning that I'm gonna give an overview of the school. Well I did say "They" are always together. So I shifted the focus to both of them so when I referred to "he" it was clear that it was the Coach since Glenice did mention that aya was only there for the Coach...hmm. guess that wasn't clear enough D; The dialogues that I created are ways for the reader to know about the character. When I wrote, "wow he really did it" --> it's a foreshadowing that will come next chapter, means he'll do something big, etc oh man I can't believe i'm gonna say this directly it's like giving away what I planned for this story basta guys I'll do better on the next chapter. It was a quick intro, but don't stress too much on the details. My whole purpose here is to give hints, so it's a bit fragmented since I'm moving from one character to another (also shows that I as a character do not know these people personally, and that what I know about them are the rumours circulating around the school and I judge them the way I perceive them [one example is I even thought the hazeef is a friendly guy when in reality he's a pervert who likes young girls]). From my narration you can actually tell I'm pretty silent and I am very observant about my surroundings. gah English is so hard guys tagalog nalang joke HAHAHAHHA but thank you guys for giving me suggestions/criticisms. I'm not really that much of a writer so...these kind of things help me

Last edited by chaw (2014-03-20 02:28:18)

[quote=aya;#387944;1395300763]The question is who?[/quote] oh! thank you for that must. edit. [quote=aya;#387944;1395300763]This rxn of Glenice is wayyy too funny.[/quote] because it's very rare for her to see her boyfriend in her own school I only googled patola costume LOLLLLLL no idea what kind of costume that is honestly

^ yeah this next update is probably the last intro. then we're on set for the story [hr] [b]UPDATE:[/b] I made a few twists to the story, so just be ready for it. And...this next one will be a long update since I have to take us back to the present. But I'm so excited LOL I apologize in advance because it's gonna be a one freaking long chapter Aside from that...here's a preview of what the Coach looks like (all thanks to @bianx!) [align=center][img]http://cosmopolitansg.files.wordpress.com/2013/04/css0112hunk_cosmo09-3511.jpg[/img] [b]Coach Bram[/b] Been a coach in FT High for 6 years now. Looks nice. Great body. Good coach. Single. Only stays at an apartment. Always brushes his hair. Likes smiling at girls. and maybe guys too, who knows? [/align]

@aya LMAO HAHAHHA SHUT UP HAHAHAHAH when I showed it to you, you didn't even like it. your first reaction was "ewww pubes!" I don't want my readers to say that too! plus bram might ban me if I did that yoko na hahahahhaha omg

Last edited by chaw (2014-03-21 02:48:59)

[b]UPDATE: [/b]Ok guys whenever Coach Bram switches to naughty mode. This is what he looks like (this was supposed to be the photo but it was too rated R )

omg HAHHAHAHAAHAHAHAHAHHAHAHAHAH coach bram is hawt

[quote=chaw;#388121;1395384009][img]http://cosmopolitansg.files.wordpress.com/2013/04/css0112hunk_cosmo09-3511.jpg[/img] [b]Coach Bram[/b] Been a coach in FT High for 6 years now. Looks nice. Great body. Good coach. Single. Only stays at an apartment. Always brushes his hair. Likes smiling at girls. and maybe guys too, who knows? [/quote] oh wow.. i'm gonna rape him

[quote=aya;#388206;1395400045]@Natsume But the other guy has more "appeal". Hahahahaha!![/quote] what guy!? that [i]bulbolicious[/i] guy? He only have a good abs.. but you don't know if that guy is not circumcised yet or he don't have balls.