[quote]They’re not really that great because they’re so popular that people in FT High talk about them a lot (Remember the stripper?). Llyanz, the daughter of the Principal, got drunk at a victory party two years and ended up having a one night stand with the Eggplant. Nobody knows his name, even if he’s so popular. Her dad took over her school schedule, he even banned her from going to victory parties (anywhere where the boys are). But I heard he stopped doing that ever since Llyanz heard what the travelling word said about her father.[/quote] Llyanz will kill you for this Awesome pictures there

[quote=bianx]I hope there will also be a visual image for the coach next time[/quote] fangirling. [quote=chaw;#387855;1395261848]And I want to tell the all of their life stories before I get down to the main plot. So yeah. This is all background story.[/quote] I'm gunna play editor. Actually I think the main char's life stories should even be a lil longer, the info was a bit scarce. And you also have to describe yourself from time to time because the readers don't know you. Also, Alex doesn't have a description the first time you mentioned him. [i]“I heard he digs men. ”[/i] >> should be I heard 'the coach' digs men, coz you were talking about aya-sensei. [quote=chaw;#387855;1395261848]“Wow, he really did it.”[/quote] Did what exactly? [quote=chaw;#387855;1395261848]“Child, why…are…you…crying…?” "I cannot tell them... I'm too afraid! " "Child, do not cry...."[/quote] I dunno I kinda got lost here. Were you narrating an urban legend or sth?

Last edited by aya (2014-03-20 01:17:41)

Lol I thought I was clear enough when I wrote this chapter. Hahahahhaha sorry yall I was writing it thinking it was a script for a series episode I didn't want to write about my character yet because I said in the very beginning that I'm gonna give an overview of the school. Well I did say "They" are always together. So I shifted the focus to both of them so when I referred to "he" it was clear that it was the Coach since Glenice did mention that aya was only there for the Coach...hmm. guess that wasn't clear enough D; The dialogues that I created are ways for the reader to know about the character. When I wrote, "wow he really did it" --> it's a foreshadowing that will come next chapter, means he'll do something big, etc oh man I can't believe i'm gonna say this directly it's like giving away what I planned for this story basta guys I'll do better on the next chapter. It was a quick intro, but don't stress too much on the details. My whole purpose here is to give hints, so it's a bit fragmented since I'm moving from one character to another (also shows that I as a character do not know these people personally, and that what I know about them are the rumours circulating around the school and I judge them the way I perceive them [one example is I even thought the hazeef is a friendly guy when in reality he's a pervert who likes young girls]). From my narration you can actually tell I'm pretty silent and I am very observant about my surroundings. gah English is so hard guys tagalog nalang joke HAHAHAHHA but thank you guys for giving me suggestions/criticisms. I'm not really that much of a writer so...these kind of things help me

Last edited by chaw (2014-03-20 02:28:18)

[quote=aya;#387944;1395300763]The question is who?[/quote] oh! thank you for that must. edit. [quote=aya;#387944;1395300763]This rxn of Glenice is wayyy too funny.[/quote] because it's very rare for her to see her boyfriend in her own school I only googled patola costume LOLLLLLL no idea what kind of costume that is honestly

^ yeah this next update is probably the last intro. then we're on set for the story [hr] [b]UPDATE:[/b] I made a few twists to the story, so just be ready for it. And...this next one will be a long update since I have to take us back to the present. But I'm so excited LOL I apologize in advance because it's gonna be a one freaking long chapter Aside from that...here's a preview of what the Coach looks like (all thanks to @bianx!) [align=center][img]http://cosmopolitansg.files.wordpress.com/2013/04/css0112hunk_cosmo09-3511.jpg[/img] [b]Coach Bram[/b] Been a coach in FT High for 6 years now. Looks nice. Great body. Good coach. Single. Only stays at an apartment. Always brushes his hair. Likes smiling at girls. and maybe guys too, who knows? [/align]

@aya LMAO HAHAHHA SHUT UP HAHAHAHAH when I showed it to you, you didn't even like it. your first reaction was "ewww pubes!" I don't want my readers to say that too! plus bram might ban me if I did that yoko na hahahahhaha omg

Last edited by chaw (2014-03-21 02:48:59)

[b]UPDATE: [/b]Ok guys whenever Coach Bram switches to naughty mode. This is what he looks like (this was supposed to be the photo but it was too rated R )

omg HAHHAHAHAAHAHAHAHAHHAHAHAHAH coach bram is hawt

[quote=chaw;#388121;1395384009][img]http://cosmopolitansg.files.wordpress.com/2013/04/css0112hunk_cosmo09-3511.jpg[/img] [b]Coach Bram[/b] Been a coach in FT High for 6 years now. Looks nice. Great body. Good coach. Single. Only stays at an apartment. Always brushes his hair. Likes smiling at girls. and maybe guys too, who knows? [/quote] oh wow.. i'm gonna rape him

[quote=aya;#388206;1395400045]@Natsume But the other guy has more "appeal". Hahahahaha!![/quote] what guy!? that [i]bulbolicious[/i] guy? He only have a good abs.. but you don't know if that guy is not circumcised yet or he don't have balls.